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For the nature essay

1. Find a focus
2. Write out a brief for the paper
3. Organize brief into an outline form
4. Start writing
5. While writing make sure words relate to topic
6. When finished with one point examine how to bridge into another point\
correctly
7. Repeat procedure until paper is satisfactorily finished

I did'nt know much about nature or the outside and I could've gone with talking about rain but I wanted to talk about my cockatiel Spicy since she is very dear to me and so I started thinking about what was going to be the focus of the essay. I began to think about the early times of me and the bird and decided that the focus was going to be the phsycological aspects of having a pet.
I organized it based off of this dream I invented-knowingly pushes the limit of the genre but I decided to give it a shot. So the entire essay moved around this dream while still I tried to push the focus forward which was, of whether or not it was right for us to treat animals as pets. But the way I came to the focus was by writing about the feeling I had when I first got my bird and its cage and it was pretty much the image of just that the birthed the focus of the paper while the dream segments sort of was used to enhance-I thought- the rest of the paper. My writing in the paper had to match to my plan which was, introduce question(which was of whether we had right to treat pets as such and such), setup pet and my feelings, introduce the dreams, repeat question with analysis, connect dreams with question and finally answer the question. I think I matched my criteria not as good as I wanted but I made the main points clear and like I said I took a chance including a fictional dream and so this dream could be replaced by something more descriptive and real( more talk about cockatiels, more talk about definition of nature and what is natural maybe) so the dreams might get canned. And finally, I honestly could not state before writing what exactly in words was my focus, since I sort of wrote out of the feeling or mental image I had, but in the end or more towards the end I figured it out, which is interesting, how my weird dream sequences took on a life on its own but somehow managed to carry the focus of my paper.

Comments

S. Chandler said…
Your discussion here seems to indicate that you found your focus through writing - that it developed along with the paper and then you went back and strengthened it.

And yeah - you can't invent dreams. I know that is the kind of thing no one can "catch" you at, since they take place inside your head - but it would be better if you acknowledge making it up and work that kind of narrative into the essay through a different device (not a dream).

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